Day nineteen. Okay, let’s get right down to prompts. Maureen Thorson: "take a poem that already exists (it could be one of your own), and rewrite it so that each line is the opposite of the original." Robert Lee Brewer: "write a life event poem. . . . such as a wedding, birth, death, graduation, etc." And Andrea Boltwood: hay(na)ku today. Thanks for your props to hay(na)ku inventor Eileen Tabios!
Tried to mash up all three prompts. Worked hard at Maureen’s opposites, but nada. Spun out some hay(na)ku, though, that works with a life event. So here ya go, Robert and Andrea. My best shot today.
baptism
fog
san francisco
Saint Gabriel morning
face
peeks out
cocooned blanket blue
mama
and papa
dressed to nines
simple
fur collar
dashing gray suit
baby
eyes squint
blanket peeled back
drizzle
water drops
forehead wet cold
laughing
priest says
look at him
gazing
round like
he sees angels
through
stained glass
window sun sparks
rose
sky blue
clear white light
—Draft by Vince Gotera [do not copy or quote ... thanks]
No poem from Catherine today, but she's hoping to get back on track this weekend. I'll post her poem for Day 19 here when she gets caught up. Good luck, Catherine!
Our featured NaPoWriMo blog today is Fuck it. Cut ’em Up. where Anne Reynolds is serving up wickedly entertaining, fun and strange poems every day. I particularly like her homophonic translation on Day 12. She also responds, very gracefully, to Maureen's prompt today by "oppositing" Rumi. Brava!
Friends, we’re inching up on two-thirds of National Poetry Month. Whoa, listen to that — Gotta get up, gotta get down, gotta get off, gotta get funky! — lyrics on the radio just now.
Gotta
get up,
gotta get down,
| | gotta
get off,
gotta get funky! |
Keep up your poetry flash, everyone. Poetry’s everywhere, hay(na)ku all around us. Listen for it!
See you here on Day 20. Leave a comment below, won't you? Ingat.
Added 23 April 2012: Catherine's poem for Day 19 . . .
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publication purposes.
Sorry. It may return
at some point. Thanks. |
—Draft by Catherine Pritchard Childress [do not copy or quote ... thanks]
What a great poem, Catherine. Worth the wait.
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2 comments:
Really digging this form. Amazing that it is all around us - gotta get funky! and write some more hay(na)ku! Love these images:
gazing
round like
he sees angels
through
stained glass
window sun sparks
Andrea, thanks a lot! I'm still learning how to write them too. And loving it. Did you know about the recent hay(na)ku anthologies? That's the link to the first one. There's been a second.
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